Writing in the third person

So much of the work we've done in writers workshop has been written in the first person.  We talked about the novel, The Great Gatsby, by F. Scott Fitzgerald and how Nick was the witness character who told the stories of others.  I asked the group to try writing in the third person a story originally written in the first.

Bay Village and Mary Wright’s summers there…

By Ken J Wright

 

When Mary Wright was 31, a friend of hers, John Maschal, built a village of shops on a boardwalk on Long Beach Island, NJ and he asked Mary to rent the stores for him. She did a great job and got the 8 or 9 stores rented in 2 weeks and so he asked her to come help him run some of the stores and especially the restaurant. 

 

It was just John, 29, and Mary with 168 college kids running a restaurant, a bakery, an Ice Cream Parlor and a Fudge Shop, the shop that made all the money. Several of the shops she rented to friends - a T-shirt Shop and a Book Store, so she had friends around. 

 

And, oh, she had 4 kids ages 3, 5, 7, 9, so she hired two babysitters that she knew from home, Swarthmore, and brought them with her to the shore. Husband Ken was then working for Scott Paper in Philly, so he could get down during the week and on weekends. 

 

The problem was that the job was really too big for just John and Mary, so they worked night and day. Her pay for all of this was that John would rent her family a house at the shore. It worked out. But when Mary asked John for her birthday off and he said, “Just half a day!” she later found out that he and Ken had planned a Birthday Party for her in the restaurant! When the family all came through the door with a big cake and one small candle, she couldn’t stop from crying. 

 

Mary worked at Bay Village for five years, running the restaurant, her own Creative Playthings shop “The Red Balloon,” a stuffed animal shop (Snoopy and Raggedy Ann & Andy) with books to match. Later, John and Ken built a kiosk where Mary sold engraved jewelry with a friend for a few years. Then she and her family moved to Belgium.

When she came back from Belgium she again took over the kiosk and sold different items every year for the next few years. Her family has had reunions at LBI - most recently in 2001 in the house in the picture. She loved my summers there and all the friends she met. How lucky she was…...